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Facebook for Business
Facebook began in 2004 to help college students stay in contact with each
other. In fact, you were required to have a legitimate college email address to
even sign up. Now, Ffacebook has approximately 8,330,420 US English-speaking
users in the United States, Canada, and Australia alone. You can set up pages for
anything; from your pet rabbit, to your multi-billion dollarbillion-dollar business.
Hosting a business page on Facebook is a great way to market a business.
With the click of a mouse, a business can get in front of countless numbers of
eyes. Hundreds of Mmillions of people across the world have a Facebook account
and spend a significant number of hours every month (even every day!)! on
Commented [JC1]: Suggestion: change the phrase "get in
front of" to "become public to". This change can add
sophistication to your work.
Commented [JC2]: "Hundreds of millions" is redundant
Commented [JC3]: Suggestion: change "significant
number of" hours, to "several" hours to make your essay
more concise.
Facebook. Even though Facebook started out as a social network for college
students, now the biggest group of users is thirty-five years and older.
Marketing on Facebook is consequently a simple way to get a business
known. It is also a good way to popularize that business with potential customers.
It is easy to flip through the TV channels or throw away your junk mail. But an
advertisement is harder to avoid when it is attached to the sides of Facebook
profiles that people access every day.
Facebook and advertising helps a business become noticed by individuals
who are looking for the products or services that business offers. It also allows a
Commented [JC4]: "Consequently" is unnecessary here
business to easily communicate with potential customers or current clients to
keep them updated on any specials or deals that business isare running, as well as
to keep them reminded of, and in tune with, that business. Facebook and
businesses also work together to help business managers understand what
possible clients are looking for, as well as to better associate with customers they
are now serving or have served in the past.
Small businesses are especially reliant on Facebook advertising to get their
names out to their communities. Statuses updates, newsfeeds, frequently
refreshed content, and appropriate adsds, all work together with Facebook
advertising to create strong business ties. Rather than having to host their own
website, Mmany businesses use Facebook as their only web base., rather than
having to host their own website. This way, Or their Facebook page can easily link
to their main business website or visavice versa.
Especially in today’s struggling economy, Facebook advertising has
provided businesses with a cheap, yet extremely efficient way to advertise. Often
advertising on Facebook nets more results than then many other forms of
marketing.
Now that Facebook is easily viewable on cell phones, Facebook advertising
is even more notable; f. Facebook mobile users generate twice as much activity
on their accounts, and about two hundred 200 million users use Facebook on
their phones every day. Consequently, it is extremely easy to get businesses
noticed by hundreds of thousands of people each hour.
Through analyzing this vast number of individuals who how make up
Facebook and how they respond to advertising on Facebook, it is possible to
ascertain the dynamics of social networking. We can then apply this to global
marketing. By understanding how people process information, it is possible to
greatly improve business and learning.
Commented [JC5]: The word "consequently" has a
negative connotation/definition, but the tone of your essay
is positive; it doesn't seem like you're angry about
businesses easily getting noticed through Facebook. In order
to have attitude agreement in your essay, I would suggest
using another phrase like "As a result" or "So" etc.